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VALENTINE
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Literature Text
I'm a
Victim of your sweetness
I'm not
Alone
I'm in
Love
You're
Everything to me
I'm
Nothing without you
You're my own special
Treat
It's
Impossible not to love you
You're my sunshine when the
Night draws near
It is
Enchanting to be so in love with you
Victim of your sweetness
I'm not
Alone
I'm in
Love
You're
Everything to me
I'm
Nothing without you
You're my own special
Treat
It's
Impossible not to love you
You're my sunshine when the
Night draws near
It is
Enchanting to be so in love with you
Yay. 
(unless you wanna give it as a valentine, then go ahead)
(unless you wanna give it as a valentine, then go ahead
) © 2013 - 2024 CheryMiste
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactI think this is short and sweet and works incredibly well as a Valentine. I really only have one...well, I don't want to call it complaint, so I'll phrase it as more of an observation.
When I began reading the poem, the first word that caught my attention was "Victim". Now, it's a good word and it works well in the context, but it immediately cast the poem in a dark light for me. It was only after a couple more lines that I realized it was a loving poem and not one of anger, strange as that might sound.
I'm not suggesting that you change it - it does work well the way it is - but that was my initial impression because of the word choice <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/w/w…" width="15" height="15" alt="
" title=" (Wink)"/>Nice work <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="
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